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[催眠控制] 【欲之渊】21 在成人礼成人(中)(平然/存在无视/催眠/时间停止)

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写的可以,不过我提点建议,“做“的时候形容词可以少加一点或者不加,换成拟声词会比较好一点,比如;。。。啊!、嗯、唔、呜,这些而且不需要反复强调同一个优点,对于肢体动作可以写的更详细一点,男主舔穴的时候,可以从隐睾写到阴蒂再深入蜜洞攫取蜜液,舌头出来可以压在会阴上或抵在菊轮边。还有性器官的反应,比如阴唇,阴道这些可以写详细一点后面换成代词,比如花境,蜜穴,腿部可以描述一下足弓,足背,指头,奶子也是。我觉得把笔画放在描写妹子的身上,比单纯的各种催眠自慰玩法观感要好很多。
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